This poem is for the Carpe Diem #1553 challenge

You create a “fusion” haiku from the two original haiku:

Waving the pampass grass,
At the Shinkjuku station,
I said goodbye.

Yamaguchi Seison

The migratory birds
Make the wind blowing down to Osaka
From mountains frequently.

Kawahigashi Hekigoto

 

The pampass grass waves
“goodbye,” to migrating birds
riding the winds south.

The second part of the challenge was to create a Troiku (each line from your Fusion Haiku becomes the 1st line of a series of 3 haiku.  Although the 2nd haiku doesn’t adhere to the 5-7-5 syllable count) from your Fusion Haiku.

The pampass grass waves
Undulating in the wind.
Whispering sweetly.

“Goodbye,” to migrating birds.
Who pivot on air currents
And roll with the waves.

Riding the winds south.
To take up residence in
warmer winter homes.
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Narrative: I found this to be a fun challenge.  I love to try new poetry forms.  I am not sure if I did it exactly right, but I definitely wanted to try it out.

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17 Comments

  1. To Osaka blows
    Wind waving the pampas grass
    Good-bye love, life fades

    To Osaka blows
    Swirling, shivering wind, snow
    Drying with summer

    Wind waving the pampas grass
    Two lovers lay, sun shines down
    Moments, hours, days

    Good-bye love, life fades
    Cold returns, an end, no more
    To Osaka blows

    1. Kira says:

      OH MY GOSH! How do you do that? It is absolutely absurd! lol I had to really try and think about this challenge and you whip of a poem in probably less than 5mins.

      By the way I love your take on the poem. Most of us wrote about the migration. You took it a totally different direction. LOVE IT!

      1. You say “most of us” … is there a place where others are writing to this prompt. I clicked on the link in your post and there’s nothing there. I’d like to see what other people do with it.

        As for the how and the why … I really have no idea, except that these are the feelings that are in me and these poems provide me an opportunity to express them in a way that is very difficult to do with longer form fiction. To me, the most important line was probably “I said goodbye.” And then trying to find symbolism in the other lines, in wind blowing, etc.

      2. Kira says:

        So when you clicked on the Carpe Diem link it didn’t take you that page. If you scroll down on the page there is a section where people have posted links (through Mr. Linky) to their poems that they wrote for the prompt.

        Like I said, “You are a Poet.” Even if you don’t know it! lol

      3. Kira says:

        Their links are in the middle of the page. You will see their names highlighted next to a number. You can click on the name to go read their poem 🙂

      4. By the way, I don’t know that I will ever consider myself to be a poet. Why? Because it’s not something I think about or do unless prompted. I may be a photographer one day because it is something I explore on my own. And I may be a writer for the same reason. But poetry is not something I seek out without prompting. I wish it were different because I really think writing more poetry would help my prose.

    1. Kira says:

      Thank you so much! This one was a tough one. I am bit rusty with poetic skills so it made me work for it! But that made the success even sweeter!

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